Poems from Acumen, Interpreter's house, Iota, North, Orbis, South, etc.
Here's the first stanza of "Gone" - "But when she's back/ there'll be changes./ The fridge won't have stains/ loosely based/ on the costellation Pleiades./ Library books will not be liable/ to fines of 42p./ I've learnt what to do/ when we go shopping/ and she's suddenly not there". Why the short lines? Why line-breaks at all? And is this sufficient to be a third of a poem? Or even a third of a Flash piece?
In some other poems (e.g. "The birthday present"), some of the line-break replace punctuation. "Proof" has an xaxa rhyme scheme. It goes on a little too long, but I like it.
With many of the other poems I feel I understand their intent (and the intent is worth writing up as a short-story paragraph or sometimes a poem), but they're either too slight ("Wishful thinking", etc) or need another re-write to sharpen them up ("Joe's cafe", "Teahouse on the Hill, Lincoln", "Flirting", etc). However, nothing could save poems like "Credo".
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